My, darker, story of LOK

[SFFan1]

I wrote this in a few days, and my first language is not english, so please forgive the mistakes. But it's a story i wrote about what happens to Krystal on a daily basis after being captured by the sharpclaw for nearly a year. I tried to make it pretty ummm dark. But I'm not much of a writer so please excuse my lacking of skills.

http://www.hentai-foundry.com/chapter-19519.html

[FuzzFace]

Wow that's quite the story! I haven't read it all yet, but you put a lot of work into this. I've digested about a quarter of it already, and i'll read the rest on another time.

and please, you underestimate yourself. there was not lack of skill from what I've read so far.

[Doc Branny]

I definetly agree with Fuzzface here, this is great. I too wasn't able to finish in one read (about halfway) but it's 4 am and i'm about to crash so i'll finish it tomorrow. It's got my attention so far and i'm looking forward to finishing it.

[SFFan1]

Here's the next chapter: http://www.hentai-foundry.com/chapter-19561.html

I toned it down, if only a little bit. I hope to get a good storyline out of this.

[daxtinator396]

You sir have averyyyyy perverted mind and I think your writing is fantastic! I can`t wait to read the second chapter :3 I think I`ll save it for another time.

[daxtinator396]

Read the second chapter it was fantastic :3 keep up the good work! Can`t wait to see where you are going with the plot!

[SFFan1]

Chapter 3 http://www.furaffinity.net/view/8859826/

[SFFan1]

Here's chapter 4 for the few who are interested http://www.furaffinity.net/view/8886125/ .

[[Brand_Name]]

hey for some reason the last two chapters didnt really work... is there any other way for me to access them? somebody pleez help meee

[Reaver]

Read the first chapter.... Best Fucking Story EVER! I don't know why you said u didn't have skill because that is probably in my top three best porno stories. Good job and keep up the good work!

[Grape Me]

4 Chapters of awesomeness thanks!

[RussianUser]

I think it's pretty cruel to the heroine SNES. I would even add that it's disgusting. I do not think it would be worth writing a chapter about sex (especially about group sex).Sorry for my english: another country, another language design, some of the post can be confusing, but there's nothing I can do about it, we have to use the Google translator.

[[Brand_Name]]

Wait so you think that it's disgusting to write a story about sex

In a forum... Based on sex?

Also I never got to read the last two chapters, help appreciated.

[RussianUser]

Wait so you think that it's disgusting to write a story about sex

...with Ninthento's heroine: that's what confused me. But the fact of violence against Krystal made me disgusted. Yes, I expressed my opinion about the story in the first chapter. But in fact it should interest the reader, that he had read the whole story. The first chapter also contains the annual abuse of cute blue fox. I've realized that hasty and read the rest of the chapter. But then others can understand the content in a different way, "Ah, another story about a gang fuck defenseless girl and broke her mind."

I hope you will understand correctly. Fucking the language barrier ...

[napsii]

I don't know what this story is about since I haven't read it, but really, it's not unreasonable to have preferences or taste for erotic content no matter if the site hosts a lot of mature material.

[RussianUser]

Stop. If I understand correctly, at this forum, I should not have their preferences and tastes? Why? I have an opinion does not impose. I just expressed my opinion about the story, nothing more.

[napsii]

That's exactly what I said in my last post. I am agreeing that people are allowed to have their preferences.

Perhaps you misread.

[RussianUser]

That's exactly what I said in my last post. I am agreeing that people are allowed to have their preferences.

Perhaps you misread.

Yes, I made a mistake, sorry. It's all because of a bad translation, and poor knowledge of English.

[[Brand_Name]]

Wait so you think that it's disgusting to write a story about sex

...with Ninthento's heroine: that's what confused me. But the fact of violence against Krystal made me disgusted. Yes, I expressed my opinion about the story in the first chapter. But in fact it should interest the reader, that he had read the whole story. The first chapter also contains the annual abuse of cute blue fox. I've realized that hasty and read the rest of the chapter. But then others can understand the content in a different way, "Ah, another story about a gang fuck defenseless girl and broke her mind."

I hope you will understand correctly. Fucking the language barrier ...

Gotchya- I totally understand. I take the blame on this one for being too rash to accuse.

Also I still can't read the last two chapters it says I'm "not authorized to see" them. Grr.

[trunks2585]

If I'm remembering correctly, it kinda plays out how Yawg wrote Krystal's arrival on Sauria in his current LoJR comic. Minus the berries and a lot less funny. She eventually turns into a nympho and starts to crave the sexual abuse, her body so use to it that it's starting to bring her to orgasm. And as a result is hell bent on getting that release to the point that she's initiating the gangbang.

Honestly the whole thing is not my preference either, I've never cared for 'rape them till they break' stories. Probably why it's difficult for me to find Hentai I enjoy.