Krystal Demon Oral

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Krystal Demon Oral

Postby Radio-Ardilla » Thu Feb 11, 2010 7:50 am

Just thought I'd try the blow job scene since it was pretty much near completion in the file. Additions done- scene now has library sounds-- I used one clip of Krystal that sounded more lustful rather than a cry of pain. Also put in a slightly faster bj on the approach of climax- though I think it looks a little jerky or stiff (take your pick of what sounds like a poor pun to use for this scene) :) That's pretty much it. Not a whole lot of work since the scene was pretty much near completion.

Note- only one penis ejaculates in this scene. I just thought it would be neat if one were double endowed that each cock can work independently or together- depending on the circumstances. I also thought this page might inspire some variations for the demon creatures for possible other scenes: http://www.sextutor.com/double-cock.shtml
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby dollspit » Thu Feb 11, 2010 1:11 pm

This looks great so far! And no, I don't think the faster BJ looks 'jerky' (appropriate though, wouldn't you say?). It works well.

Also, that link to the 'Double Cock Sex' manual is hilarious and strangely informative.
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby Poob » Thu Feb 11, 2010 5:00 pm

Looks very good. One thing though -- you may want to double the length of the second part of the animation (make it animate twice, and then loop), so that the same sound isn't played every half second.
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby trunks2585 » Thu Feb 11, 2010 7:59 pm

a few complaints. one that is glaringly painful to me is her right hand is backwards on the cock.

and i think i see a bit of the jerkyness you are talking about, with her lower half sliding back and forth on the ground in the first part of the animation.

other than that a good start.
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby Ketsueki » Fri Feb 12, 2010 12:54 am

Agreed with Trunks; it looks like she has two left paws. A similar thing is that her tail looks completely disjointed from the movements of her body; it should be more synced to them.

Aside from that SFX for the second and third stage of this, those were the only glaring issues I saw.
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby Poob » Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:24 am

I hope I speak for everyone here, but this really is a great effort -- we're not trying to scare you away :P
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby dandan » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:13 am

well, other than the things other people have pointed already, I just want to ask: Is the demon's left (our right) hand supposed to be holding Krystal's head, or just floating?

If it is supposed to be helping her, there are parts where it's just floating then
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Re: Krystal Demon Oral

Postby Radio-Ardilla » Sat Feb 13, 2010 7:43 am

Hey everyone, Just a quick reply. Thanks for the comments. Though I think I should state that a number of the errors that have been pointed out were already in the animation before I even touched it. As I stated, this scene was pretty much finished with the exception of the sound and the cum shot. But I'll certainly look into making changes when I have some free time- employment gets in the way of that sort of thing in case you didn't know :-)
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